tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7823671741939904607.post8099606375503244462..comments2015-04-27T18:47:00.753-05:00Comments on Ryan Mueller's Writing: New WIP Chapter 1Ryan Muellerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05364911012131580497noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7823671741939904607.post-87620119167311523712013-12-23T23:12:02.515-06:002013-12-23T23:12:02.515-06:00Wow! Just wow! O_O Your description was superb! Yo...Wow! Just wow! O_O Your description was superb! You really painted a very clear and vivid picture for this entire chapter. Excellent work, it shows! The battle sequences with the wolves and the serpent were excellent. I wish I could write this well!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7823671741939904607.post-33092640792932345092012-06-23T13:22:27.658-05:002012-06-23T13:22:27.658-05:00you describe well and do action well. There's...you describe well and do action well. There's a POV issue in the second paragraph, though. You're not in his POV there, though you then slip into it. Have you read Orson Scott Card's book on Character and Point of View? It's quite good.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7823671741939904607.post-62597060155195159762012-06-07T02:14:01.534-05:002012-06-07T02:14:01.534-05:00I really liked the vivid descriptions. Set the sce...I really liked the vivid descriptions. Set the scenes up quite well.magic minthttp://www.loneswing.comnoreply@blogger.com